Cloudshapes day 14

Jane Dougherty's avatarJane Dougherty Writes

For Paul Brookes’ challenge. The photos that inspired this poem are on Paul’s blog here.

Cloud wings and arms

When the sky is laid bare,
stripped of our constraining walls,
garlands of lights and other ephemera,
when nothing protects us from the glare
of eternity, the great beyond,

some see an overarching comfort,
strength in the forming and unforming of air.
Angel, they say, benevolent power.

I see a bird buffeted by storm winds,
soaring on unseen currents,
mastering the billows of the sky,
pinions and hollow bones feather-light,
a tiny majestic thing.

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TheWombwellRainbow #PoeticFormChallenge. It is weekly. Week Nine form is a #BrefDouble. I will post the challenge to create a first draft of a poetic form by the following late Sunday. Please email your first draft to me, including an updated short, third person bio and a short prose piece about the challenges you faced and how you overcame them. Except when I’m working at the supermarket I am always ready to help those that get stuck. I will blog my progress throughout the week. Hopefully it may help the stumped. Also below please find links to helpful websites.

Bref Double poetic form

Gone

I try to follow in her tracks
they melt and disappear
I don’t know if it’s love or not,
except inside my head.

I try to follow scents and trails
with senses that I lack
but she is nowhere to be found;
I feel a constant dread

and search in all her favourite spots;
the places she once loved.
The cafes, river walks and cliffs;
I read the books she read.

But words will never bring her back
from sprouting grass where flowers rot.

How Did It Go?

I’m not a massive fan of this format as I wanted the rhyme on the fourth line. It may be my fault for dropping into a ballad rhythm that wasn’t required. I moved the three C rhymes to make it less clunky. I wanted to move an entire stanza but that would have seriously broken the whole rhyme scheme!  Who is it about? I have no idea.

-Tim Fellows

Reunion Tour

MAGA Jesus now returned much more gruff
from the soupy foam like irate kaiju,
turned all the water into Coors Light beer,
explained loving neighbors was démodé.

First things he applied were much bleaching creams,
endorsed Kanye’s hot takes re: money huff.
For sex workers still had a soft spot, sure…
though washing his feet was more proper way.

Assured toiling plebs in debt up to ears
their pie was still in that sky, could they wait,
once high ticket price was received in full.
Meanwhile, bring to heel womenfolk, blacks, gays.

“I wish that they’d stick to their older stuff,”
a fan bemoaned. “That’s what I paid to hear.”

How Did It Go?

Enjoyed this form immensely, a unique and unusual one am so appreciative Paul introduced to us here with his Wombwell challenge. Love how it takes the migrating, recurring line-endings one might find in a Sestina and accomplishes something similar with rhymes. I hope I applied conventions and expectations properly, the lines in the example I read were seven syllables in length, I ended up landing on an even ten being a boring fan of pentameter, could have been more adventuresome and tried an unrounded number, hope some other participants do! Wrote this the day after our local elections (positive results in Minneapolis and nationwide, by most reports), inspired by some rather disturbing posts I observed on social media. Specifically one user wrote, “Every Christian who votes Democrat tomorrow should be subject to Church discipline.” That reminded me of an infographic/meme going around, which reminded that (despite misconceptions and applications to the contrary in popular narratives) the central biblical character of the New Testament was ‘brown, Jewish, Middle-Eastern, a child refugee, poor, homeless, an advocate of loving your neighbor’. Their conservative, conflicting conception of a messiah, I thought in consequence, would make a rather terrifying and problematic figure in the event of a literal reappearance. The tragicomical result of envisioning such a tyrant is the following poem, which is written by a Green who incensed Trumpers may also take small comfort in knowing is not a great fan of the other wing of the duopolistic bird either. I’m also especially partial to this form’s interspersed rhymeless lines, the blank spots scattered throughout (distinguished as X’s, versus ABC rhymed endings). Those really allows for more coherent linear narrative and storytelling, something quite difficult to achieve in a Sestina with more stringent dictates, obligations. Enjoy!

-Jerome Berglund

CloudWriter #Cloudshapes. Day Fourteen. What shapes can you see? What stories are developing in these cloud photos by Julian Day, Gaynor Kane and I? You may contribute your own cloud photos and/or videos as inspiration. Writers and artworkers have been fascinated by clouds and what they see in them for centuries. This challenge features three different cloud shapes a day for thirty days. You may respond to one, two or all three photos. Could you write on the day you saw the photos and email your drafts to me, with a short, third person bio?

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Sylvia Plath inspired trinitas poetry from Samantha Terrell

This week’s #poeticformschallenge is a trinitas, invented by our own Samantha Terrell. More useful info on the form to be posted later today.

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Cloudshapes day 13

Jane Dougherty's avatarJane Dougherty Writes

For Paul Brookes’ challenge. The photos are on his blog here.

Clouds of the dead

Spirits we used to say,
the breath of life, drifting slowly,
gently, along the journey
beyond the horizon, to find peace,
in a place we had never seen.

We know now what lies over the hill,
the net of roads and ribbons, the busy sea
threaded with shipping, the beach, the heat,
the pines and palms, deserts and forests,
faces shiny with welcome, happy,
unhappy. We don’t look too closely.

Look rather into this ocean sky,
heaving with the faces of the lost,
hands reaching out in supplication,
the waves of grey, rippling
with contained anger, the reproach,
ready to fall on our careless heads.

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CloudWriter #Cloudshapes. Day Thirteen. What shapes can you see? What stories are developing in these cloud photos by Julian Day, Gaynor Kane and I? You may contribute your own cloud photos and/or videos as inspiration. Writers and artworkers have been fascinated by clouds and what they see in them for centuries. This challenge features three different cloud shapes a day for thirty days. You may respond to one, two or all three photos. Could you write on the day you saw the photos and email your drafts to me, with a short, third person bio?

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Cloudshapes day 12

Jane Dougherty's avatarJane Dougherty Writes

My poem for Paul Brookes’ challenge. You can see the photos here.

Bridge

And if there was a bridge across the sky,
across the water deep below,
beyond the time and tides that drag the sands
of night and day and years that flow,
through life and love until we die,

would we dare walk that high and unknown path,
to step into a world of blue,
of seagull white and grey? Just take my hands;
I’ll leap and dare the aftermath,
if only it can be with you.

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Review of ‘A Spark in the Darkness’ by Kate Young

Nigel Kent's avatarNigel Kent - Poet and Reviewer

Entrants to local, national and international poetry competitions may be familiar with the name, Kate Young. She has an impressive record of reaching the final stages. Most recently she was placed second in the Canterbury Poet of the Year Competition, and in 2021 she was placed third in the Vernal Equinox Competition and won the Tiny Things competition from Stirling Makar. A Spark in the Darkness (Hedgehog Poetry, 2022)is, however, the first time a collection of her work has been published, and what an impressive pamphlet it is!

As the title suggests these are poems of hope and optimism. At this bleak time of conflict and economic hardship, Young reminds us of the importance of hope and of its power to transform. Firefly in the Doorway ends with the following lines: ‘’your aura/ confident as a spark in the darkness// despair unwrapped from the jumbled hitch/ and fold of this…

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#CloudWriter #Cloudshapes. Day Twelve. What shapes can you see? What stories are developing in these cloud photos by Julian Day, Gaynor Kane and I? You may contribute your own cloud photos and/or videos as inspiration. Writers and artworkers have been fascinated by clouds and what they see in them for centuries. This challenge features three different cloud shapes a day for thirty days. You may respond to one, two or all three photos. Could you write on the day you saw the photos and email your drafts to me, with a short, third person bio?

KANE12

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Cloudshapes day 11

Jane Dougherty's avatarJane Dougherty Writes

For Paul Brookes’ Cloudshapes challenge. You can see the eerie photograph that inspired this poem here.

On this day

This day
remembering the unimaginable
the blood red mud
the acid-picked bones

the sky remembers Titans
the embrace that sparked the world
with touchwood and amadou
the rot that blazed then
and blazes still.

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